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Writing Mini Lesson #27- Revising a Narrative Essay- Exchange- Rockin Beginnings

Are you looking for ways to help your students write a good lead to their narrative essay? This post will give you ideas to teach what I call ROCKIN’ BEGINNINGS. It is one revision lesson from the series of writing mini lessons for DARE to REVISE. It is part of over 30 lessons for scaffolding in a writer’s workshop curriculum and is the first lesson that focuses on the E for Exchange.  Students should exchange their story beginning to grab the reader’s attention! 

 

 

Get your students excited to write a rockin’ beginning to their story!  Follow these steps to help them EXCHANGE their beginnings.

 

1. TEACH

Explain to the students that E stands for Exchange.  Exchange means to trade it.  For all of the EXCHANGE mini lessons, they will be exchanging their writing for a better, more exciting version.  Tell them that you will be starting with the beginning of the story. There are 10 different ways to make a rockin’ beginning for narrative writing!

 

1.   Onomatopoeia
2.   Question
3.   Amazing Fact
4.   Quote
5.   Excitement
6.   Opinion
7.   Humor
8.   Repetition
9.   Shocker
10. Curiosity

 

2. MENTOR TEXT

Start by reading a mentor text. If you have one of our interactive writing notebooks, there is a file for mentor texts in each grade level!

 

Some good mentor texts are:

The Paper Crane by Molly Bang  

The Very Hungry Caterpillar by Eric Carle.

This sample comes from Love, Ruby Lavendar by Deborah Wiles.  Read the following. Ask your students: How does it grab your attention? “Murderers! You can’t have them all!” Ruby Lavender leaned out the car window and shook her fist. The car lurched to a halt in the dirt yard of Peterson’s Egg Ranch, and Ruby scrambled out the door. She ran in bare feet as fast as she could into a dusty sea of chickens—a sea of chickens being herded toward their death at the chopping block.

 

3. MODEL

Modeling is always important. Model the following examples with your students.

 

Prompt:  Write a narrative on taking a time capsule back to the dinosaur era.

1.   Onomatopoeia- Stomp, Grumble, Growl
2.   Question- What if you came eye to eye with a Tyrannosaurus Rex?
3.   Amazing Fact-  Did you know the Brachiosaurus was 39 feet tall?
4.   Quote-  (doesn’t have to be famous)  My friend said, “This place is ancient!”
5.   Excitement-  Oh no!  The dinosaur is going to eat me for lunch!
6.   Opinion-  I think the change in climate killed the dinosaurs.
7.   Humor-  (simile or hyperbole)  The dinosaur is as fast as lightning!
8.   Repetition-  Help!  Help!  Help!
9.   Shocker-  It all started when I was in the mouth of a Brontosaurus!
10. Curiosity-  Imagine going back to the time of dinosaurs.

 

Then model by taking a story your’ve been modeling as a class story and revise the beginning!

 

4. TAKE NOTES

Whether using interactive writing notebooks, taking notes, or pasting a mini anchor chart in a notebook, students should keep these ideas in their writer’s notebook. They will be able to use it as a reference in future writing!

 

 

5. PRACTICE

Ask students: Which do you prefer?

 

1.  Hi My name is Pam.  Or  Crash,  Boom, Bam!
2.  I have a favorite teacher.  Or  Have you ever had a teacher you will never forget? 3.  Benjamin Franklin was famous in history.  Or  “If everyone thinks alike, then no one is thinking.”  Benjamin Franklin once said.

 

Then give students a narrative prompt and ask them to create a rockin beginning using the 10 ideas.

 

6. APPLY

Students should now go to the rough draft of their story and revise the beginning by exchanging it for a rockin’ one!

 

 

7. SHARE

Share, share, share! Students will love to hear each other’s rockin’ beginnings! I hope this post provided you with ideas for teaching students how to be more creative in their narrative writing!

 

 

 

 

LAST LESSON:  WRITING MINI LESSON #26- DARE TO REVISE- R FOR REARRANGE

 

NEXT LESSON: WRITING MINI LESSON #28- MILLION DOLLAR WORDS- WORD CHOICE!

 

CLICK HERE TO START THE FIRST LESSON IN WRITER’S WORKSHOP 

 

This lesson is also included in the STEP-BY-STEP Interactive Writing Notebooks with mini lessons for paragraph, narrative, opinion, and informative writing designed to scaffold through the writing process.  It includes anchor charts for teaching, interactive notebook pages for taking notes, modeled stories, mentor text, practice sheets, tracking forms, goal forms, prompts, and so much more!  Click on the pic below to find out how to motivate students and boost test scores with this STEP-BY-STEP year-long writing program!

 

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